Sorry but this is ugly

DarkWarrioR said:
Sorry but this is ugly

Try constructive criticism - it helps people improve. A comment like that just seems condescending and rude.

Although this isn't to my tastes, here are a few things I'd recommend improving on:

Defining boundaries / outlines. There are places without outlines and colour that seeps past the outlines that really draw away from the overall piece. In addition, the male is decapitated due to the border. Unless that's the idea, I'd recommend cropping down the field of view.

Unnatural Body Shapes. The buldges in the male's right arm, the female's back left leg, along with the males left leg all look off. Highly recommend smoothing these out.

Too much going on. There's a lot of movement. It can take some time to differ between "too little" and "too much", but I think it's on the "too much" scale that pulls away from the action.

Considering (from what I can see) that this is your first ever animation, you've done really well! Tweaking will get you there!

wisp_the_husky said:
Try constructive criticism - it helps people improve. A comment like that just seems condescending and rude.

Although this isn't to my tastes, here are a few things I'd recommend improving on:

Defining boundaries / outlines. There are places without outlines and colour that seeps past the outlines that really draw away from the overall piece. In addition, the male is decapitated due to the border. Unless that's the idea, I'd recommend cropping down the field of view.

Unnatural Body Shapes. The buldges in the male's right arm, the female's back left leg, along with the males left leg all look off. Highly recommend smoothing these out.

Too much going on. There's a lot of movement. It can take some time to differ between "too little" and "too much", but I think it's on the "too much" scale that pulls away from the action.

Considering (from what I can see) that this is your first ever animation, you've done really well! Tweaking will get you there!

For constructive criticism as such, might be best to share it to them directly. Don't think they're as aware of feedback in e621 as say their Tumblr Source.

DerpboyZer0 said:
For constructive criticism as such, might be best to share it to them directly. Don't think they're as aware of feedback in e621 as say their Tumblr Source.

Already messaged them on Tumblr letting them know :D

Im glad he is getting some head, cause he really needs one.